[derek west]

finally completed my 4 page A5 leaflet. all looks good, (to me anyhoo) but i'm struggling for a good headline. something that will grab there attention, something that will make them at least open the leaflet and see all the pretty pictures and maybe even to push them to see the back page where the discount voucher is.

really struggling so come on guys put your thinking caps on. headline winner get 2! yes count them, 2 cans of viking lager

around 6 words for the big banner header then a very small follow up line of around 10 words.

all i can come up with and yes it is a bit lame but here goes


"remember when it looked like new?
let us put the proud back into house proud.    yeah yeah yeah. i know cheeeeeeeeesy

anyhoo have a go if ya like

ps...its for cleaning all surfaces not just carpets

[Shaun_Ashmore]

If it's going to local homes and businesses why not try

Your LOCAL professional Cleaning Company

Don't try and be clever just tell them you are local and you will get more people keeping it and more old dears using you.

Shaun

[richy27]

My cousin who lives in canada sustains his whole business ( not cc ) on a leaflet. He produces A6 folded leaflets with a scratch card style discount voucher n the middle mind you every oneis $5 off but h gets a great return aspeople read his lealet. big baner on front INSTANT WIN

[Mike Halliday]

why is the most important thing on the back? the discount voucher

how about having it on the front, make it look like a £10 note and have the headline how will you spend your free £10

plus  your leaflet won't have a front or a back....... it will just have the side that faces up when it hits the floor.

[Andrew Briscoe]

                                    Want the Best  !!
                                    Forget the rest !!
                                   Call Derek West !!

[Joe H]

Have you just started a fan club Andrew. What does it cost to join? 

[Andrew Briscoe]

Have you just started a fan club Andrew. What does it cost to join? 

10 bob Joe.

Could form it into a society
the Derek West Appreciation Society   

Nah, i just like a little rhyme, worked for John West

Andrew

[derek west]

why is the most important thing on the back? the discount voucher

how about having it on the front, make it look like a £10 note and have the headline how will you spend your free £10

plus  your leaflet won't have a front or a back....... it will just have the side that faces up when it hits the floor.

ive got a £10 off voucher that looks like a ten pound note on the front if it lands face down

just need a good one liner for the back if it lands face up, confusing myself now

shaun, "local" is worth a thought, i'll see what i can fashion out of that word.


10 bob, i don't think you'll get one bob to join never mind 10, bobs don't like me very much

[Shaun_Ashmore]

What about Fred Wests son buries the opposition?

Shaun

[derek west]

or what about, i wear a shirt and tie so i must be good,

[Shaun_Ashmore]

Smart and tidy just like my work.

Shaun

[michael wadsworth]

Why don't you try "I AM A CARPET AND UPHOLSTERY CLEANING EXPERT" Might as well brag about how good you are. Mike

[derek west]

can't mike

i'm not an expert, apparantly you have to be cleaning for 50 years and even then you don't know everything

[Phil Spencer]

Look where you like for a good Carpet Cleaner......
For an EXPERT West is best!!!!

Maybe?

Phil

[markpowell]

"A CLEAN HOME IS AN HEALTHY HOME"
Mark

[Tony Gill Carpet Smart]

Andrew 10 bob !!!! is that 50 pence ?  or a TEN SHILLING note ?

TONY

p.s. read about them in my history book 

[Doctor Carpet (Ret'd)]

Never trust an EXPERT

An "EX" is an unknown quantity.

A "SPERT" is a drip under pressure.

 

Roger

[Steve. Taylor]

Dont throw me away you may need me someday

Affordable cleaners you local cleaning company

If its not clean we havent been

[derek west]

well steve gets the lager but its a bit long for the space i have left. cheers steve i may work that in somewhere

[Steve. Taylor]

Derek you could always put it across the corner of a page this space is not often used also if you put a yellow band with the black writting on top this will catch the eye and make people read it just IMO

THATS WHAT MOST SIGNS ON THE ROAD ARE YELLOW ON BLACK SO IT MUST WORK

PS YOU CAN STICK YOUR 2 CANS OF VIKING LAGER IN YOUR BOWSER TANK