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Title: A stupid question Re:leafleting wording
Post by: Crystal-clear on March 19, 2013, 04:23:26 pm
See below



TRY US OUT  CALL TODAY!!
TRY US OUT , CALL TODAY!!
TRY US OUT  & CALL TODAY!!

Which is the best way to put what I'm trying to say for some reason I feel
The first one flows the best but my other half says has to be one of the bottom 2
Before anyone says anything about try us out I'm aware that can lead to a few one offs but that's what I'm after as many payers as possible and I feel those words soften the blow a bit anyhow looking forward to replays have printer waiting to print 25,000 so no pressure. !:)
Title: Re: A stupid question Re:leafleting wording
Post by: AshWhite on March 19, 2013, 04:32:49 pm
CALL TODAY AND TRY US OUT?
Title: Re: A stupid question Re:leafleting wording
Post by: Jakey boy on March 19, 2013, 04:37:03 pm
You could always put

 Try us out! Call today!

That way your emphasising both points,

Otherwise I'd definitely put a comma after the 'Try us out'

So... TRY US OUT, CALL TODAY

Or... TRY US OUT - CALL TODAY  

Or... TRY US OUT! CALL TODAY

My favourite is the first one with small lettering and two exclamation marks...
Title: Re: A stupid question Re:leafleting wording
Post by: windiewasher on March 19, 2013, 04:39:09 pm
I wouldnt worry.if someone wants to ring you they will not just because of the way you worded a leaflet.
Title: Re: A stupid question Re:leafleting wording
Post by: ascjim on March 19, 2013, 04:42:39 pm
I wouldnt worry.if someone wants to ring you they will not just because of the way you worded a leaflet.
Title: Re: A stupid question Re:leafleting wording
Post by: Perfect Windows on March 19, 2013, 04:44:46 pm
As it happens, I like "try us out", as it subliminally suggests that they aren't committing themselves.  Provided you doa  good job, they'll be yours with just the usual drop offs from people who did want a one-off.  They'll call whatever you say.

As for the rest, I don't think any of the wording wouldn't work.  Plus, I always do what my wife tells me to do, so I wouldn't have a say.

Vin
Title: Re: A stupid question Re:leafleting wording
Post by: Crystal-clear on March 19, 2013, 04:46:58 pm
Hi guys thanks I also know it ain't a big deal but I get some what OCD !

So some good Suggestions call today and try us out sounds good
So does try is out! Call today!

So should we rule out the current one with no ,?
As jake said
Title: Re: A stupid question Re:leafleting wording
Post by: Crystal-clear on March 19, 2013, 04:49:22 pm
Hi vin It's always good to hear from A leafleting god !

Try us out! Call today!

What do you think I think this could be the one !!
Title: Re: A stupid question Re:leafleting wording
Post by: Perfect Windows on March 19, 2013, 05:12:35 pm
Print 8,333 of each, put an identifying number on the top corner and then ask people which of the leaflets they have.

Better still, do it with three completely different types of leaflet and see which of the three gets the best response.

Vin.

P.s. Been saying things along those lines for three years and never done it...
Title: Re: A stupid question Re:leafleting wording
Post by: Crystal-clear on March 19, 2013, 05:18:47 pm
Hehe that's a good idea something I may do in future ! But I need a bit of reassurance what do you think the 2x! Good to print ;?? ;)
Title: Re: A stupid question Re:leafleting wording
Post by: robbo333 on March 19, 2013, 05:43:56 pm
How about:
Why not try us out? Call today on...
Title: Re: A stupid question Re:leafleting wording
Post by: deeege on March 19, 2013, 05:47:49 pm
Call us out, try today!





 ;D
Title: Re: A stupid question Re:leafleting wording
Post by: Paul H on March 19, 2013, 06:13:26 pm
Why delay .... Call today  ;)
Title: Re: A stupid question Re:leafleting wording
Post by: HampshireWindowCleaning on March 19, 2013, 06:33:13 pm
Forget leafleting, get out canvassing, you'll get 10x the work
Title: Re: A stupid question Re:leafleting wording
Post by: Ian Lancaster on March 19, 2013, 06:43:17 pm
Our leaflets are the ones we've had for years and they still work!

But just as an afterthought - I'm trialling this on my new(ish) car:

Need a window cleaner? Google "Ian Lancaster"

Go on, try it......


 ;D
Title: Re: A stupid question Re:leafleting wording
Post by: Crystal-clear on March 19, 2013, 06:52:11 pm
Forget leafleting, get out canvassing, you'll get 10x the work

Also ten times the messers mate pls don't teach me about canvassing that's all I've done for ages :) I will still do it but I'm also hoping to enjoy 50 or so good paying first cleans from these leaflets


Some good Suggestions, I have just had the double ! Sent to me as an example I like it I think ill go with that one